Little Darling


Photograph – Copyright Dan Wesker 2010

Little Darling

The stories we heard about Nina,
how she’d walk out half way
through a gig for no reason at all.

After her death we found out how ill
she’d been, but it didn’t stop us loving
her and the ache in her voice.

She taught us that a fist can block
out the sun, but it shines anyway.
The summer light illuminates

a red party dress hanging in the window.
You were his little darling, so much
trust wasted in the bullets of his hands.

Poem – Copyright Naomi Woddis 2010

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7 Comments

  1. Naomi, this is beautiful!

    I love the rhythm of the last two lines.

    I’m a woman and writer as well – would love for you to read some of my stories on my blog bangbangbangfirgalmoonlopbangbangbang.blogspot.com

    My first book is out next March.

    Thanks so much for the poem xx

  2. Three is the magic number, yo. Anyway,these lines got me hooked.

    but it didn’t stop us loving
    her and the ache in her voice.

    She taught us that a fist can block
    out the sun, but it shines anyway.

    x

  3. Agree

    She taught us that a fist can block
    out the sun, but it shines anyway.

    is particularly nicely-wrought. I enjoy your enjambments all, and the tercets work for me; they always will, as long as the scansion is sound. The final stanza is strongest in that respect, and it’s the strong rhythm that hold it together so well (Abigail above noted the rhythm here also). However I’m a rhymer (even in free-verse mode), and kept hanging on key words for even a little half-rhyme within a line; but this of course is just personal preference and I should explore structured blank-verse more.

    I have started a Poetry Circle on Facebook where we post, comment and enjoy each others’ work, check it out even just for a quick look. (My own Poetry blog is not yet up and running).

    x

    http://www.facebook.com/?ref=home#!/group.php?gid=107480952604804

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